Below is the original proposal for the comics series DEMO that artist Becky Cloonan and I produced. The original text is in black, was written in December of 2002, and remains unaltered except for spelling fixes, edits for clarity and to remove some personal information. Commentary is in red, and was written in November of 2005.

- bri

 
DEMO
A monthly superhero comic
Proposal for AIT/Planet Lar
© 2002 Brian Wood(and Becky Cloonan pending all approvals)


Overview:
Starting as a 12-issue run of (mostly) single-issue stories, DEMO will track and examine the experiences of a group of "mutant" youths, teens and twenty-somethings, albeit in decidedly non-superhero settings and styles. (the Marvel Comics' term "mutant" I will use in this context, in this proposal, to refer to the abnormalities the characters possess. It is an indirect rip on Marvel's mutants, yes, but at the same time something very different. "Mutant" is a simple term to describe it for the purposes of the proposal, but won't be in the actual scripts)


For some context, I first wrote this down at the end of 2002, which was around the time I was doing Fight For Tomorrow, Pounded, and the Global Frequency covers. Somehow the notion of the Marvel "mutant" still held some appeal... I know I had a text file of all my NYX story ideas on my desktop at the time, and really wanted to find a use for them.



Demo?
DEMO is a working title (I am open to suggestions for new title ideas you may have after reading this), meant to describe a sort of transition, a starting point, the period in the lives of my characters where they come to grips with themselves, their "powers" and how it affects their jobs, lives, loves, and families. Much like any young person, their lives are literally demos, rough working versions of what they will eventually turn into.

I also really like, visually, the look of the word "demo".


 
Where this comes from:
This series will borrow heavily from concepts and characters I wrote for the aborted Marvel Comics X-Men series NYX (which Joe Quesada created). In brief, NYX was meant to be an updated, "street" version of the X-Men, wherein the racism-mutant metaphor was updated to more modern times, as class-mutant. It dealt with poor mutant kids living/squatting in NYC, "just trying to get by" and live their lives on their own terms, in spite of their abilities hindering them (most of the time.)

NYX was meant to be my chance to tell the stories I wasn't allowed to tell during my run on Marvel's GENERATION X, an extremely conventional "teen superhero" series. DEMO is beyond both of these, into new territory. Literally, the stories I wouldn't have been allowed to tell on either GEN X or NYX.

As I stated above, I was still a little fixated on those unused story ideas, but once I started on Demo, it immediately became its own thing, and the NYX story ideas were heavily reworked or just tossed right out the window. In retrospect, the desire to work in this specific sub-genre of superhero comics (reluctant teen heroes) was probably not as strong as I thought it was.


 

Format:
DEMO is designed to take advantage of the "superhero" label (and really, in all practical terms, it's superhero in label only), and the monthly format comic readers are most used to. I figure 32 pages in all, with a minimum of 24 pages of story per issue. If collected, I propose two 6-issue volumes. I would be interested in talking about a monster 12-issue volume, as well, as a possibility.

I would have probably accepted a two volume collection, but my heart was set on the single volume. See, this was always a plan, my desire anyway, to see this series collected eventually, finances permitting. And at the time of writing this, I had no idea what AIT would think about a monthly series, so I was making an effort to include as many options as possible.


DEMO is suggested as a color book, again to "trick" our market into giving us as much orders and exposure as possible. The coloring therefore should be top notch, best we can get in order to not be dismissed as second-class on the shelves.

Ooops... did I say "trick"? :)

Shortly after this, Becky and I pretty much ruled color out as something we just weren't interested in doing. We like our b/w comics. Probably it would have killed the series, financially. But the thinking behind it was to sort of "dress up" our indie book as much as we could to appeal to the sort of comic shops that wouldn't give a b/w comic a second look. It sounds funny now, but I had no idea who would even give a shit out a book like DEMO. I thought I'd have to resort to gimicks and antics like this just to get by.


(I would happily accept a slick b/w book, with some sort of toned method on nice paper, similar to Paul Pope's 100%, as an alternative to color)

Now we're talking. My secret desire all along. I kept saying, over and over, I wanted it "like Heavy Liquid, like 100%" and finally, as Larry told me, he sent a copy of 100% to the printers and requested that type of paper.


I envision DEMO to be a series of stand-alone stories, with little to no crossover. Characters may re-appear and past situations may be referenced, but it will always be assumed that every reader is a first reader, and each issue will be a starting point (and a finishing point for that matter). I am even thinking of labeling each issue with title and subtitle first, issue number secondary, to further drive home the point. Meaning, one issue might be called "DEMO: Strange Condition", say, and elsewhere on the cover would be a smallish #5.

"Strange Condition"... that Pete Yorn song? Weird. Anyway, as you know, the naming convention came to pass, but I saved the recurring character idea for LOCAL. The stand-alone, "each issue a jumping on point" was a concept I really felt strongly about and refused to be swayed from, even when people like my agent and AIT and some retailers really wanted me to "unite the cast" or do a 13th issue where they all meet up or something. To me, it seemed like doing something like that would invalidate the entire concept of the series, what we spent 18 months killing ourselves for.


And clearly, people responded to this format.



If and when I feel I need two issues to tell a story, the options are to write an arc and clearly hype it in Previews as breaking the single issue mold and to readers and on the cover of the book, or simply produce a double-length issue that month.

I'm glad I never did this.


And finally, I am also open to this being a bi-monthly book, if time and money dictates it needs to be that way.

Ditto.

As a final suggestion, to really give the single issues a fighting chance in the direct market, we should consider a healthy overprint of the issues themselves, keeping as many of them available as possible, for reorders.

A lot of factors made this series work, but this was one of the biggest ones.



 
Becky Cloonan:
This would be presented to Becky, and if she wants in, would be given co-ownership of the individual stories and characters and the DEMO name, if she agrees to sign on for a minimum of 12 issues. Any profits to us would be a 50/50 split.

Funny, a "minimum" of twelve issues. I guess I was leaving the possibilty open of more DEMO, although I don't remember ever bringing it up again after I wrote this proposal.


 
The Stories:
Like I stated earlier, the DEMO characters are young, not any older than say 25, and are "mutant". This isn't a world with shadowy (or flamboyant) superhero teams flying around. This is the real world, and in essence, any "mutant" in the real world isn't gonna look like a superhero. He'll be the crazy homeless guy on the corner muttering around aliens and wearing a tinfoil hat, because he probably CAN ACTUALLY HEAR the real aliens but we all dismiss him as an insane bum.

This is a little embarrassing, I gotta say. These are VERY Generation X type of ideas, and I guess if I included them here, I must have thought I would write them, but for the life of me I couldn't imagine it.


It may be the teenage girl who overdoses on her mom's valiums because she can't get her thoughts to slow down to "normal" levels. It's the band geek in school with the 180 IQ composing like Mozart. It's the violent redneck, who when provoked, flies into a berserker rage and kills a fellow kid, and wakes up not remembering what he did or why. It's the shoplifter girl that realizes that the frustrating electrical static charge her body always carries can short out the security tags at Urban Outfitters.

Well, the first idea right there is DEMO #1, and the last idea of the shoplifter was something Dave Choe thought up for NYX...Jubilee was going to be a compulsive shoplifter, using her powers to beat the security systems. The other ideas... ugh, see my previous comment. My only defense is that I came up with these (loosely put, as they are pretty stock X-men ideas) three years ago.


These people don't have any wise Professor looking out for them, and they have no role models. They hide from other people. They try to make their relationships work. They try not to hurt people. They try not to die.

Hello, Generation X!!! Christ.


And then there are the ones that are fortunate to have "powers" that are really pretty cool and not a hindrance, and they love their bodies and what they can do. Being different can be fucking rad, in this case!

Also touched on in DEMO #1.


These will be indie stories, character studies. It's about the people, nothing more. A non-superhero superhero book.

It's funny how I flipped back and forth from sounding like I was pitching a pretty straight Gen X rip-off to what DEMO actually went on to be.
 
Story notes
1/5/03
(subject to re-sequencing and title changes)
Issue 1
DEMO: Going Strong

(The debut issue will probably be the most conventional of the bunch, relatively speaking. We gotta hook people inwith this one before we start to fuck with them)

We open up in midtown NYC, lunchtime. It's teeming with suits, the sidewalks are just lousy with them and nothing else. We start our shot tight on two young girls, all Dickies and messenger bags with badges and patches. Figure them around 20. Girl Left is talking to Girl Right, all serious. What we can see of the background is wall-to-wall suits, midday crush.

Girl Left:
HEY, YOU EVER GET THE WEIRD FEELING THAT YOU'RE DIFFERENT SOMEHOW?

Girl Left:
THAT YOU HAVE SOMETHING SPECIAL, AN ABILITY OR A PHYSICAL TRAIT OF SOME KIND, THAT SETS YOU APART FROM EVERYONE ELSE?

Girl Left:
BUT, LIKE, YOU DON'T WANNA TELL ANYONE, IN CASE SOCIETY GETS FREAKED AND TREATS YOU DIFFERENT, ALL PREJUDICED AND SHIT?

Girl Left:
YOU KNOW THAT FEELING?


As this happens we pull back gradually to a full panel shot of the girls in the crowd, they being the ONLY deviance from the suits. Two cool kids in a sea of conformity.

Girl Right:
YEAH, I DO…

-beat-

Girl Right:
ISN'T IT FUCKING GREAT?

And with that fun stab at mutants and Marvel, we introduce DEMO.

You can see this is a version of the first scene in DEMO #1, a much shorter one and with two girls as opposed to a couple. An upbeat scene dealing with the notion of powers being something extremely cool. "Going Strong" - that's interesting. Not sure why that got ditched and if it had anything to do with "Stand Strong" or not.

Also, that panel description above went on to be the cover of DEMO #1, as well as the DEMO COLLECTION.


 
Issue 2
DEMO: Emmy

EMMY – a country girl in her mid-teens, poor, basically trailer trash, a total tomboy. She lives with her disabled mom in a trailer park. She works at the desolate service station, pumping gas and counting out-of-state license plates.

I hope I didn't steal that last bit from some country song.


Emmy doesn't talk. She can, but she won't. When she was much younger, she realized that any verbal command she gave pretty much happened. People couldn't help but obey her. If she told a friend to get lost, it happened. Any fleeting euphoria she experienced with that power disappeared the minute she, in a moment of frustrated anger, wished someone she cared about harm, and it actually happened. A beloved pet, a pesky friend, even her mother (Emmy is responsible, inadvertently, for her mom's disability and their subsequent poverty. She is wracked with guilt). So she just stopped talking altogether.

Pretty much exactly what we went on to do.


Emmy's existence is working and caring for her mother. It's bleak, lonely, ugly, and hopeless. But what else can she do?

180 degrees from the "extremely cool" notion of powers in the first issue.


A couple assholes at the service station answer that question. Their sexual taunts and bigoted behavior find their way through Emmy's defenses and she lashes out with an insult, a reflexive "drop dead!" This is witnessed by her boss, who sees the bodies in the car and a panicked, sobbing Emmy running for home, and calls the cops.

Back home, Emmy cries into her mother's shoulder, but gets little comfort. Her mom is pretty much a vegetable. In a moment of brutal clarity, she makes a decision. Their miserable existence and distant police sirens tell her it's the only choice she can make.

Spoilers below, if anyone cares:


Putting her mother into bed, she whispers the words to her to send her to sleep, a permanent slumber, a peaceful death. Emmy ends her pain for her, and goes to do the same to herself, only realizing then that her power doesn't work on her. Built-in self defense mechanism. The cops arrive and take her away.

Holy smokes! I wonder why I didn't put THIS in the story? Might have been too much of a pull from the Belgian film ROSETTA, which heavily influenced this story. Perhaps I didn't want to be too depressing? (unlikely, considering future issues of DEMO).
In retrospect, I sorta wished I had written it this way.


(the sense of responsibility that comes with this sort of "power" is nothing new to superhero comics, nor is the inevitable outcome of misused power. But Emmy and her mom are stuck, the situation doesn't have a pretty outcome no matter what she does, and she behaves like someone like her actually would in that situation. Its real, honest, and it sucks.)

I'm pretty sure I included this story synopsis in the proposal to show the extremes of the stories I wanted to tell: the cheery Marvel-style mutant stuff and then this heavy, depressing, "real life" stuff, so AIT and Becky would know what they were signing up for. Interesting.

The proposal document was signed:

(rough draft, 12/27/02)
-bri